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Old 01-16-2007, 04:24 PM
rv65 rv65 is offline
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Default Re: (Graffititech)

Quote, originally posted by Graffititech »
try to be more fluent,some of your periods could be commas
for example:"Underneath those changes are mostly the same but a Shannon derived steering rack is used. This gives it much better dynamics. The prices largely remain the same which makes it a good value if priced right."
when it could say this for example.... :
"Underneath, things are mostly the same except the Shannon derived steering rack, which gives the icon much better driving dynamics"
just my 2-cents

Thats a thing I need to work on in general.

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